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1. 第一句表达太中式了，“亚洲的发展需要我们怎么做”，英语里是没有这样子表达的，都会直接用物当主语就行了。 Asia needs to transform and upgrade its development model in keeping with the trend of the times.
2. Because development holds the top priority, which is also the key to deal with the urgent conflicts and problems Asia is facing. 这一句语法问题，只有because，没有所以，句子结构不完整。Sustaining development is still of paramount importance to Asia, because only development holds the key to solving major problems and difficulties it faces.
3. It requires us 和第一个问题一样，比较中式，参考译文用it is important that这样的句式。 transform the way economy developments这里应该用动词develops。  to achieve our goals in development累赘，删除。It is important that we should shift the growth model, adjust the economic structure, make development more cost effective and make life better for our people.
4.  Asian stability应该是Asia's, Asian主要是起修饰名词的作用，表示名词的属性，并不强调所有关系。and eradicate unstable factors. 原文说的是破解难题，而且你这里用eradicate，显然太过了，不稳定因素怎么可能彻底消除呢。
5.  traditional and non-traditional affairs threatening from time to time. 这里threatening分词形式就是非谓语了，不是完整完整句子。
6.cooperating friendly这里friendly是形容词，不能用作副词，携手努力就是concerted efforts，或者join hands together
7.  regional long period of stability.语序不对。regional放在stability前。
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