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原文：Yesterday, there were a football match between our school and the No.12 Middle school.

错误：使用了复数形式的动词were与单数名词a football match不匹配。
修改：Yesterday, there was a football match between our school and No. 12 Middle School.

原文：Both the teams were strong ones.

错误：使用Both the teams时，通常不需要在both和teams之间加定冠词the。
修改：Both teams were strong.

原文：A few minutes after beginning, they kicked a goal, our team started to attack against.

错误及解释：这句话缺乏主谓一致和逻辑连接词，而且attack against是不正确的用法。
修改：A few minutes after the match began, they scored a goal, and our team started to counterattack.

原文：A short time, we got score 1:1.

错误及解释：A short time短语缺少动词，且score 1:1缺少空格和标点。
修改：Shortly after, the score was tied at 1:1.

原文：The halftime soon came.

解释：这句话虽然可以理解，但表达上稍显生硬。
修改建议：Halftime came quickly.

原文：The time passed quickly, the rest of time was three minutes.

错误及解释：这句话的逗号使用不当，造成了两个独立子句错误地连接在一起，应使用并列连词或分成两句。此外，the rest of time应更明确为剩余时间。
修改：Time passed quickly, and only three minutes were left.

原文：Suddenly, one player of our team gabbed the ball, the ball he kicked got into the opposite goal, which avoiding the goalkeeper’s legs.

错误及解释：gabbed是一个拼写错误，应该是grabbed。这里的表达也很混乱，包含不必要的重复信息和语法错误。
修改：Suddenly, one of our players grabbed the ball and kicked it into the opposite goal, avoiding the goalkeeper’s legs.

原文：Every one was surprised for it.

错误及解释：Every one应写作Everyone，而surprised for it是不自然的表达。
修改：Everyone was surprised by it.

原文：Finally, our school team beat the No.12 middle school team.

错误：中学的编号和Middle School之间应有空格，且Middle School中的M应大写。
修改：Finally, our school team beat No. 12 Middle School team.

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