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同学你好~
原句: During the days of military training.
问题: 这句话是一个片段，不完整。
修改: During the days of military training,

原句: Everyone of us did carefully things we should do.
问题: 句子结构不正确。“did carefully” 的用法不自然。
修改: Every one of us carefully did the things we were supposed to do.

原句: Although at the time, the weather were very hot, we were trained over six hours every day.
问题: “were” 应该是 “was”，因为 “weather” 是不可数名词；“at the time” 用法可能有些多余。
修改: Although the weather was very hot, we trained for over six hours every day.

原句: In the blazing sun, we tried to lived up to high standard that were required.
问题: “lived” 应为 “live”，“standard” 应为复数形式 “standards”。
修改: In the blazing sun, we tried to live up to the high standards that were required.

原句: No one wiped off the sweat of back which streamed down by hot.
问题: 表达不清晰，“by hot” 不正确。
修改: No one wiped off the sweat from their back, which streamed down due to the heat.

原句: The only three days, our face became tan.
问题: “The only three days” 表达不清，“face” 应为复数 “faces”。
修改: Within just three days, our faces became tan.

原句: We were proud of it and happy.
问题: 这句话基本正确，但为了让文章流畅，可以稍作调整。
修改: We felt proud and happy about it.

原句: The military training made us to develope good discipline and gave us a lot happiness.
问题: “develope” 拼写错误，应为 “develop”；“to” 在这里不需要；“a lot happiness” 缺少 “of”。
修改: The military training helped us develop good discipline and gave us a lot of happiness.

原句: We will remembered it forever.
问题: 时态错误，“will remembered” 应为 “will remember”.
修改: We will remember it forever.

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