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同学你好哦~
1.There is a saying goes that don't lose at the starting line.【housework word?是想表达什么~这里可以用常言道...】

2.They hope school can set the recruitment rule that students who own specialities have priority or  be put into the same class.【hope希望...更恰当。or后面的主语，根据同学的意思应该是who own specialities 这些人...，所以后面调整下，转换成被动态】

3.If they study together, more interests could be  discovered from each other excepting the monotonous communication of professional knowledges.

4.For the consensus, college  students from 985 and 211  get a job with high salary easier than others.【这里985和211要解释下哦~其他人不一定看的懂。可以直接描述为顶尖大学，名牌大学】

5.The employment pressure spreads to the primary school and innocent children in the end.【this factor 因素蔓延？直接用employment pressure做主语】

6. So, educational institution have to forbid any kinds of special enrolments of students in school  to prevent excessive competition.【直接用to prevent表示目的，后面不用加从句了】

一个小建议，第一段同学并没有表明自己的观点哈~后面的文章内容说明了你的观点，不过第一段还是要说明下
祝同学学习愉快~