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同学您好，

同学最大的问题在于把句子写的太长，这样容易出错，自己也分辨不出来，读者也容易跟不上思路。
分辨一句话长度会不会太长就是自己读一遍，能轻松读下来为优，同学好几句话不换气都读不下来....
下次同学注意一下，尽量多个短句减少错误量，也不要用过于复杂的句子。可以用一些词汇来丰满而不是一味追求长度。
比如这句话：
Firstly, the indoor distribution is three big parts with roughly same size occupy the central space which in horizontal direction and two small grass areas locate in two whole edges respectively.
可以改为：
Firstly,the indoor distribution is made up of three big parts. The area of these parts is roughly the same. One of them occupies the central space in horizontal direction, and two small grass areas locate in two whole edges.
 South part is divided into five pieces which are four office rooms and a receiption room, which is behind a small entrance.
which太多了，从句太多了：
 South part behind a small entrance is divided into five pieces，including four office rooms and a reception room.
等等这些长句都没语病上的大问题，就是过于繁琐了哦~

然后一些小提议：
1. an office layout 可以直接说office map
2.changing 可以直接用changes表示变化（名词）

希望有帮上同学哦~