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同学你好~
University life must be a journey that everyone must go through.
这里must be可以改成is，这只是一个一般的陈述，不是推测。

While, different people have

different opinions on university life.
这里while改成However

   On the one hand, many a person considers that students should live alone in university because

of several opinions.
because of several opinions 这部分可以去掉，或者改成because of several reasons

In the future, independence ability contribute to students adapt to society better.
contribute to改成helps，不然to后面只能加名词短语，不能跟adapt

Secondly, students can do whatever they want to do in their spare time without consider others

idea.
considering这里应该用动名词，others' 这里要加所有格

However, a majority of people argue against students live alone in university.
students' living，这里要用动名词短语，作介词against的宾语

They thinks

students should live with their friends and classmates.
think 这里不需要用单三形式

living with each other can solve  almost

questions in life and school.
句子首字母大写。almost是“几乎”的意思，改成most

Also, playing with them  improved the relationship between friends.
improved改成can improve

Only in this way, students can get the help from their friends when they need the help.
only in this way can students 这里only在句首，要用倒装形式


But also we need the own time to improve ourselves
the own time改成some private time 一些私人时间

University campus is a place to exercise ourselves, and we shouldn’t to waste the time.
shouldn't后面加动词原形waste

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