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you unknown改成you want to know 你想知道。
unknown未知的；不详的；未被确认的
The man's identity remains unknown.
这名男子的身份还是个谜。

computer前加the

what I can help you 宾语从句用陈述语序

your life is the same as mine，加上谓语

Until改成when，当……的时候

send的过去式是sent

liked 过去式

can改成could，过去式

stayed 过去式

and I could use QQ to keep in touch with my classmates 这样表达

it include这句表达不地道，改成and it was also important that there were games in the computer

was so attractive that my grades went down 用过去式，成绩下降了

was unwilling to leave，要加上to

table后面用句号

I liked browsing the Internet 这样表达

my health was affected by the computer screen 电脑屏幕影响了我的健康

下一行 computers 复数表示泛指

the society news改成news

study改成accumulate 积累

下一句it改成they，指电脑和网络两件事，they can make us forget time or people around us它们会让我们忘记时间和身边的人
make sb do sth 让某人做某事

please be careful not to use the computer for too long 请注意不要使用电脑过久

I wish you a happy life. 祝愿你生活愉快。

delight是名词，不修饰life

yours改成your，形容词性物主代词。


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