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同学你好，很高兴为你批改，
1）逗号后面首字母不要大写，这句：
，Because he is 30 months old 这里Because要改成because；
2）常规检查可以用这个词：  routine examination，
regular exam意思上更像是 规律的考试。
3） After that I started my work，I am always busy，and today I worked almost all day，
时态尽量别用得太杂，建议说，I was always busy，跟上下文更和谐。同样后面建议继续用过去时，如果不是单眼痛就可以用eyes，另because后面接句子，而because of接名词，即建议改为：my eyes hurt because I looked at the computer for a long time .
4） So I need a rest and take some eyedrop. 如果need和take是并列的动词，这样语义结构不太合适.建议改为： So I had a rest and took some eyedrop.（过去时）如果同学想表达“需要滴点眼药水”即need做实意动词，主动“需要”要用need to do结构，可以说 So I needed to have a rest and take some eyedrop.（have和take并列）
5）I usually do some English reading or listen English listening，这样说比较繁琐，英语听力和阅读都可以用do这个词，所以并列的句子可以写成I usually do some English reading or listening更简洁
6） can help 这个用法比较中式英语，其实说“它能帮助我”直接用help就可以，可以改为：It helps me release my pressure from work and  life
7）Recently I have been reading an English book，It called 《Jane Eyre》，这句还是时态过于杂糅，建议简化，直接都用过去时就可，后面it指代不够明确，另外“被叫做”最好用被动语态，可以说Recently I read an English book，the book was called 《Jane Eyre》，也可以用从句Recently I read an English book which was called 《Jane Eyre》

以上，希望可以帮到你哦~继续加油~