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原文：近年来，海淀区围绕高新技术产业的技术创新的公共科技服务需求，加速各种创新要素的聚集，不断完善科技服务业，基本形成了研发设计，成果转移转化，创新创业，科技金融和科技咨询等科技服务业的完整链条，有效促进了科技成果的转化和产业化。


译文1：In recent years, focusing on technology innovation in high-tech industry and request（request？这个词使用不恰当） for public scientific and technological service, Haidian District has accelerated the accumulation of innovative elements, continuously improved science and technology service, and therefore formed a complete chain for research and development, transfer and transformation of research results, boosting innovation in starting a business, technology finance, technology consulting and other aspects in technology service（句子太长！分成几个小句！）. Consequently, it（it是指谁？） has been effectively promoted（为什么用被动？） for transformation and industrialization of scientific and technological achievements.

译文2：In recent years, focusing on the technological innovation and public needs of technological service, Haidian District accelerates the conglomerate of innovative elements of all kinds, and it keeps improves the technological service industry, which forms research and development design, result shifting and innovation as well as entrepreneur, technology and finance, technology and consult and other technological service industry chains and so forth, whereupon promotes the shifts and industrialization of scientific fruits（句子太长！分成小句！）.
总的来说两个译文都差不太多，有些地方有很浓重的中文语调，而且句子过长，一般翻译英文句子最好不要超过三行
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